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Fumbling with Grace

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It’s already April 8th. Where has the time gone. That’s not really a question, more like an observation. It’s gone into cleaning, planning, paperwork and research. That’s all about my RL, not my writing. I’ll get to that in a second.

As for progress on my novel, it’s been slow since the last post. I’ve gotten up to 89,000 thousand words in the new-new draft versus 78,000 in the new-old draft. I’ve finally gotten through the climax, but the tenses and POVs are still not completely correct, nor is the punctuation. The issue is that the the male Dom is talking in the present about his past. I have the past [for the most part] in italics when he is directly relating his experiences “as told to” his present-day female sub. The problem is this: If he is speaking, in the present, about the past, is it a direct quotation, such as ” “. Or, is it quote within a quote, such as ” ‘ ‘ “? And what quotation to use when he’s relating something that someone else said in the past within that dialogue with himself in the past but speaking to her in the present?

The next part is where I have to chop – not prune – the prose. It’s too detailed as it includes the entire written DD contract between them in the present. It would be fine as an addendum, but it simply bogs down the story too much. Not to mention those chapters run about 20,000 words. I’ll keep some, but portray it as conversation and action rather than a flow chart with Roman numerals and bullet points.

I was at the Naples Botanical Gardens recently. If and when travel starts back up again, and you happen to visit SW Florida, the Gardens are a must see. I was down there finishing up the paperwork on my new place. I’m going to be moving some stuff soon, but I won’t permanently move until June. In the meantime I’m working around my house getting it prepped for sale. I also paid off the mortgage so it will be easier to sell. I hope to get about 150K, that’s the average in my neighborhood over the past year. I’m now debt free and I plan to stay that way. Once I move I may go back to work part-time… but I also want to focus on my creative writing and photography to see if I can generate steady income that way.

Naples Botanical Gardens

Oops… counting words

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One of the negatives of the Word version I’m using is that the word count on the docx. stops showing past 99K. Makes it difficult to figure out where you are. Where I am right now is at 75,000 words on the newest version of Grace, which is still 10,000 words more then the complete manuscript which topped out at 108K.

I’m nearing the first climax, which is 2/3rds through the story. There is a reason for that. It’s because I’m stubborn. I write the way I want to write. I’ve tried writing more mainstream, but if that makes me miserable, why bother? It’s very likely my novels and novellas will never be a success, never mind a commercial smash, but that’s not why I write in the first place.

A quick blurb: This is not a light and fluffy spanking story. Boy meets girl. Girl gets spanked. Wedding bells and a baby nine months later. This spanking story will make you cry, laugh and scream. It will make you angry, sad and aroused, but it will never make you comfortable.

I’ve mentioned the plot device before in various posts, but not in much detail. It is also why this manuscript has given me fits for ten years. Did I mention as well that I’m stubborn? A dirty little secret about writing is that the words are not static nor dead on the page/screen. Every writer hears the characters talking inside, they often drive the narrative to places the writer never thought of going. But the experiences, the traumas, the joys and sorrows of your life find their way to the page/screen as well. Authors are not the words we write but neither are the words we write not based upon our lives.

So: Plot device.

Character 1 is present day male Dom

Character 2 is present day female sub

Character 3 is past day female sub [title character]

Character 4 is past day female switch

The narrative is told from the viewpoint of #1 in the present, relaying his past with #3 and #4 to #2. In the past, #3 and #4 tell their stories to the reader which sometimes but not always involve #1. The past and present are 8 years apart through the climax -see above- then shortly afterwards, the past collides with the present.

What the reader sees is the complete picture, but the pasts of #3 and #4 are much worse than #1 ever knew. #2 wants to know about #1’s past because she also has a hidden past that #1 doesn’t know about. When #1 reveals what he did to #3 and #4 that precipitates a crisis by triggering #1, whereby the D/s that #1 and #2 are doing, screeches to a halt, but not for good.

The novel does with end with HEAFN [that’s Happily Ever After For Now] because I’m a sap at heart. Love me a good romance.

Halfway home – not house

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It certainly feels as though many of us have been [and continue to be] under house arrest. I suppose we should all be grateful that tracking ankle bracelets are not mandated as are face masks. My title though is about my current editing of my spanking novel Grace. There are several dirty little secrets about the conflict between writing and editing.

The first is that editing never, ever reduces the word count. [Unless entire pages of plot are discarded for the sake of expediency. Which will happen soon in my novel.] Of the original word count of 108,000 I have edited the first 41,000 words. However, the current word count stands at 51,000. Thus, a net increase of 10,000 words in a manuscript that was too long and wordy already. *sigh*

The second secret about editing is that it is never done. Ever. This is at least the twentieth time I’ve gone through my manuscript and as mentioned in my head-hopping post, I’m still finding POV errors from ten years ago. And, since I’ve switched back and forth from 1st person to 3rd person past and present who knows how many times, the he/I and she/I pronouns are all over the map. As a part B of never-ending editing, every single book I have ever read; new or old, has editing errors in the text. Doesn’t matter how famous the author or how prestigious the publisher, there are always errors in grammar and punctuation.

The third secret is this: Editing sucks. Which is why authors turn it over to editors as soon as possible. Authors write. Editors edit. Even though every single word an author writes is perfect and editors never stop trying to ruin a brilliant story with ‘recommendations’, it’s a relationship, that in the end, creates a better story. Not matter how many times an author states they are halfway home.

The truth about editing

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It sucks.

I mean; it really sucks.

You work really hard on a story, send it to someone, and they go; “Meh”.

I write a variety of things; poetry, essays, flash fiction, short stories and long-format novellas and novels. But no matter how meticulous I craft my narrative and characters, there is always room for improvement. The key is finding the right editor.

For me, it’s Ina Morata of Clarian Press. She has a keen intellect and an extensive depth to both grammar and vocabulary [albeit of the English-English language variety, which leads to interesting discussions when Americanisms crop up] along with a historical literary provenance, that creates a template for how a story should read.

The most important lesson I’ve learned from having my work edited by numerous people, is that the only goal an author should have, is to seek the best possible result. If an edit makes for a better book, then make the change and don’t mourn your original efforts.

Nearly as important though as a writer, is to find your ‘voice’; the style in which you are most proficient. That voice needs to be a solid base so that no matter how much editing is done, it is still recognizable as your own. A good editor trims the excess, prunes back the prose so that new growth and grafts make the finished product even more fruitful. Writing is not about word count, it is about making each word important and integral to the story.

I always start my long-format fiction in flash style. I think of it as splashing paint on a canvas. It’s not meant to be perfect, or even coherent. It’s an experiment to see if the characters and plot have potential. The more you write, the more you cast off. There’s nothing wrong with that. Always seeking the perfect first draft is guaranteed to make it impossible to ever finish anything. Imperfection is not only inevitable, but essential to editing.

What I call a first draft is a misnomer. Before I submit a piece of fiction, long or short, the manuscript has normally been ‘edited’ by myself at least a dozen times. I swap chapters, change tenses, substitute narrative for dialog and vice-versa. My style, my voice, has developed into exploring the emotional bonds we create and the consequences of our actions. I don’t fill in the background normally; the physical aspects of the characters, the detailed clothing or places they inhabit. I enjoy reading books that do so, but for me, as a writer, I don’t think in those terms when creating.

A good editor partners with the author by taking that first draft, reading it, then breaking it down into various components. Keep. Change. Discard. While ultimately the decision remains with the author, by explaining the whys, an editor guides the prose into becoming stronger and better. The mantra, “If it makes a better book, any change is good”, is very helpful in taking personality and emotion out of the process. Which leads back to the title of this post.

The truth about editing, is that it is extremely difficult and fraught with feeling: if you allow yourself to believe your first draft is perfect. It’s not. It’s only a starting point. Having other eyes read your work can be intimidating, but the payoff can be a spectacular result.

Happy writing,

Byron Cane